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Posted: 25 Jun 07, 02:32 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I don't know if this should go in the fan-art section. However there is no particular place for art like this. Anyway, I hope you enjoy it.

A stranger visiting your home.
You took my hand and let me in.
Somewhere in "Living on my own"
and other sounds you dwelled within.

Your face of bronze so well depicked.
Again your heart will never break.
Yet, the warmth upon your cheeks
is gone forever in the lake.

It keeps your secrets. Thank you for
bringing me to you so near,
granting me your inner core
and the songs I longed to hear.

There... Where you will not be old.
To curl beside you breaks me free
because throughout the air cold
I see you reached eternity.




And eventhough the time did pass

and memories tired lied,

and we will all be turned to dust

your song shall never die!
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Posted: 25 Jun 07, 08:04 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

You don't have to rhyme. In fact, in this case it might be better if you don't. What you should aim for, I think, is a natural flow in your verses (each stanza should sound like a melodically gliding whole), which is best achieved without forcing yourself into a tight frame of rhyme-schemes.

It's a mistake even great poets have made, and the main reason for rhyme being very much discredited: people believe it's easier, when it is in fact much more difficult to write a good RYHMING poem, than a non-rhyming one.


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Posted: 25 Jun 07, 09:47 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

More Rythm More Rythm!


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