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Posted: 13 Jan 04, 15:08 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Been a while since I presented any of my stories for your consideration. Here's one I finished off today, inspired by a dream I had. I'm very pleased with it, do let me know what you all make of it.

http://freespace.virgin.net/pa.hayes/eleanor.htm

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Posted: 13 Jan 04, 15:09 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Whoops, did it again.

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Posted: 13 Jan 04, 15:31 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

"seemingly both amused and slightly scandalised by the suggestion"

Good story! This was my favorite line though... :p


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Posted: 13 Jan 04, 16:10 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Welcome Peter Moffatt. You'll find some of us are ok just ignore.............

Oh right. Sorry.


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Posted: 13 Jan 04, 16:14 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

When I first accidentally posted with that account (I made it as a test to see if I could get it to work when the board was down) the other day I briefly considered using it full-time and thus staging an incognito comeback, but thought you'd probably work out who it was eventually.

By the way Banquo, how are you enjoying the Brett Holmeses on BBC-2? I'm enjoying them greatly myself having never seen them before. "The Copper Beeches" on Saturday was a bit of a weird one though.

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Posted: 14 Jan 04, 13:47 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Very good, they can get very weird, but to me Jeremy Brett is the definitive Holmes. I saw Watson in something the other day, Edward Hardwicke? I can't remeber if it was contempory or not. That's going to bug me now.


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Posted: 14 Jan 04, 15:04 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Hardwicke turns up in "Love, Actually", briefly.

However, he's not Watson yet in the BBC-2 run - it's still David Burke up to and including "The Final Problem." Hardwicke took over after that until the end of the series.

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Posted: 14 Jan 04, 19:38 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

That's a very good story, Paul, I am really impressed. You should be proud of your writing skills. I have to say that I don't envy you for your dreams!


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Posted: 15 Jan 04, 02:44 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Thank you all. It was just the image of the brains and the eyes in jars that came in the dream really, but as soon as I woke up I knew I had to use it somewhere. I was a little worried that it might end up being too similar to Roald Dahl's "William and Mary" from his "Tales of the Unexpected", but I hope I managed to avoid coming too close.

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Posted: 16 Jan 04, 14:06 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I remember now Hardwicke was one of the Catholic priests in Shekhar Kapur's excellent Elizabeth which was on over Christmas sometime.


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Posted: 16 Jan 04, 14:58 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I thought of the Roald Dahl short story, Paul. But this one differs, it is in some ways even more creepy. I really admire your writing. :-)




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Posted: 16 Jan 04, 15:49 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

An excellent story, but maybe you should change the title to something more "interesting", if you know what I mean :)


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Posted: 16 Jan 04, 17:06 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Yeah, I thought about the title but couldn't think of anything decent!

Read it out at the Creative Writing Society feedback meeting yesterday, and quite a few of the women there expressed unhappiness at the inherant - well, quite blatant, frankly - misogyny of the story. As well they should, I might add. It is quite a sexist story when it boils down to it, or rather it involves misogynystic characters, but that's the sort of story I wanted to tell. I wanted them to be grotesque men.

Any of the women who've read it here similarly unhappy?

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Posted: 18 Jan 04, 12:47 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Unhappy? No. It's the whole point of the story, it's what makes it good! Any different, and it would not be the same. It would be worse.




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Posted: 18 Jan 04, 12:49 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Bloody hell thats good!
I looked on your web site a while ago dude, keep it up!

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Posted: 18 Jan 04, 13:53 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I'm sure you can publish a collection of your stories somewhere (as a book I mean)... That would rock!


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