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Posted: 22 Aug 04, 19:37 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

It's pretty whatever, but you need a last name...unless you are like...Horace...or Ovid...


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Posted: 22 Aug 04, 20:11 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Its very nice.

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Posted: 22 Aug 04, 20:22 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Just beautiful. Welcome to Queenzone, Chris.


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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 10:26 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I love poetry. Especially this piece.

I dedicate this next piece to God.

There once was a man named Miller
His wife, he wanted to kill 'er
There was pushin' and shovin'
To get her into the oven
But instead, he decided to grill 'er.


...this kettle is boiling over...

...one dump...one turd...two tits...John Deacon...

...one prawn...one shrimp...one clam...one chicken!
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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 11:14 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

iGSM wrote:

I love poetry. Especially this piece.

I dedicate this next piece to God.

There once was a man named Miller
His wife, he wanted to kill 'er
There was pushin' and shovin'
To get her into the oven
But instead, he decided to grill 'er.
LOL!


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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 11:50 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

You mean like

"Told my girl I just had to forget her
Rather buy me a new carburettor?"


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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 12:59 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

LOL, Janet! I think you got it right. ;-)

I have to agree though, my nerves simply knit up inside me when I hear poems with forced rhyme. Happened a couple of times in this one too. Othewise I suppose it'd be nice.




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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 17:22 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Forced rhyme and meter are things that are really hard to evade when you set up such parameters for yourself. Often you would be going along fine in a stanza thinking, "Hey, this is really great!" But then, when you least expect it, something goes wrong, and sometimes you will have to scrap the whole stanza. I, for one, prefer such limitations in poetic form, although it's hard to get it right.


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Posted: 23 Aug 04, 17:48 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

ThomasQuinn wrote:

Music Man wrote:

Forced rhyme and meter are things that are really hard to evade when you set up such parameters for yourself. Often you would be going along fine in a stanza thinking, "Hey, this is really great!" But then, when you least expect it, something goes wrong, and sometimes you will have to scrap the whole stanza. I, for one, prefer such limitations in poetic form, although it's hard to get it right.


The main thing in writing poetry is scrapping parts. As a famous writer once put it: "WRITING a book isn't difficult, REMOVING imperfect parts is".


That, my friend, is a brilliant quote. Who made it?


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Posted: 24 Aug 04, 12:37 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Very nice work Tick-Queener! :D


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Posted: 24 Aug 04, 13:13 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Congratulations on your relationship you two :)

The poems are nice.. first one seems a little long :-P