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Posted: 26 Jun 05, 20:33 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

A Child Dies
Everyone always turned their back
Even when they heard him cry,
To the sounds of violence from that shack
They closed their ears when they walked by.

It's not our problem you could hear them say
When the child would ask for help,
They just walked away on that day
Even when on his chin they saw the welt.

Everyone knew just what he did
When he got home from that bar.
Toys on the floor, a mess on the bed,
A little spanking suddenly gone too far.

One night the sad cry was silenced.
No one had the chance to say goodbye.
Maybe if someone could stop the violence
No more children would have to die.




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Posted: 26 Jun 05, 20:38 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Fortunately, there aren't any Queenzoners named ''no''.


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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 11:15 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

(lights up a zippo lighter)

When the children cry let them know we tried
When the children fight let them know it ain't right
When the children pray let them know the way
Cause when the children sing then the new world begins


[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Brandon wrote: [/QUOTENAME]... and now the "best you can offer is Mr. Jingles? HA! He's... just pathetic.[/QUOTE]
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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 11:30 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

When a child dies
Rip out his eyes
Sell them to strange guys
Or bake them into pies
To serve with chicken thighs
And a platter of French Fries
But that may increase your size
If you want to be wise
Watch out for eye-stealing spies
Who will tell a lot of lies
And always wear a diguise
As soon as you get your supplies
You must arise
This is all I advise
To protect his eyes
When the child dies
____

I'm bored..but ya, the syallables don't really stay consistent, but I just felt like seeing how long I could go rhyming. lol


"The walls we build around us to keep sadness out also keep out the joy."

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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 11:50 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

the_hero wrote:

amadeus does it again

yu-hu! let's celebrate! zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...


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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 12:12 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Mr.Jingles79 wrote:

(lights up a zippo lighter)

When the children cry let them know we tried
When the children fight let them know it ain't right
When the children pray let them know the way
Cause when the children sing then the new world begins


Oh God..White Lion..*LOL*

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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 15:14 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Finally, proof that you don't even read the posts...

I did NOT make that poem, my dad did, and posted it on here to see what you thought of it. Not one good, or for that matter, 'decent' comment has been made about neither my poorly written poem or the poem that is on this thread.




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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 15:17 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I liked it, that's why I'm still waving my zippo lighter.


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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 15:44 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I did not read your post because you have lost my respect. Though no one is allowed to envoke your freedom of speech, no one is allowed to envoke my freedom to not listen. I no longer see fit that I should waist my time reading what you, amadeus, have to say. You seem to have the same regard for my posts.

And if you'll note, I only responded to what was said by Alex.


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Posted: 27 Jun 05, 21:14 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

<font color =#CC00FF>***Marial-B*** wrote:

After reading your first poem... why would I care to read another??? And I was answering Vic and Alex's response


More proof that you people do NOT read. Marial, please read my previous post.


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Posted: 28 Jun 05, 08:03 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Alex Solan wrote:

ZZZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...

u quoting me without my permission??? aaaaaaargh!!! now u must pay!!! :P


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Posted: 28 Jun 05, 09:00 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I don't really care about him getting an interesting life, but whatever life NOT ONLINE... that would make a change, wouldn't it?


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Posted: 28 Jun 05, 09:03 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

You've got a little e-mail Sonia... Did you receive my 2nd SMS???


I got to try al little more,

because I'm an asshole but I'm learning.



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