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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:24 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I need a man’s perspective on something.

I’m a fiction writer and my hero sees his love-interest being assaulted. She's in the clutches of some guy and shows signs of having been knocked around. I'm guessing my hero’s first instinct is to pummel the bad-guy into the ground, but I need more. I need to get into his head - what is he feeling, thinking?

So... can any of you gentlemen out there share what your thought process might be? What emotions might you acknowledge at the moment you realize ‘your’ woman is in danger? What about during the fight? Are you thinking about her at all or are you completely into the fight zone?

A couple of notes – my hero has yet to openly acknowledge his feelings for this woman, but they are real and they are strong. She's in shock, so she doesn't come between him and the villain during the fight... and just so you know, in the end, the villain does get away (at least for the moment).

Oh! One other thing - the villain is armed with a knife, but the hero only learns this after he’s involved in the fight.

I’ll take whatever info you want to share. Thanks in advance! ;-)


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:29 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Again, Im right here

That depends, is he desperate? Does he enjoy fighting? Or does trouble just keep coming to him?


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:32 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Queen Of Wrestling<h6>Jamie's Bitch</h6> wrote:

Again, Im right here

That depends, is he desperate? Does he enjoy fighting? Or does trouble just keep coming to him?


Wow. You are right there, aren't you? :-)

No. Hero is not desperate. He's a hard-working man who owns his own small restaurant and puts everything he has into it. He's certainly not afraid of a fight, but he doesn't go out and look for one. As for trouble coming to him - until he met the heroine, that wasn't an issue. ;-)


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:49 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I guess I should add that the hero is in his mid-30's.


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:51 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Obviously he feels righteous indignation towards his female friend's attackers. In fact, he would likely feel this seeing any woman being attacked by men. It is just intensified since she is a love interest. Of course, during the fight, all he is thinking about is staying on top and not getting his ass kicked - unless he is Bruce Lee, where he would lazily take them out as he would the trash.


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 13:58 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

lol. Love the Bruce Lee analogy. :-)

Since his feelings are intensified because she's a love interest, does that make him less careful? I mean, would emotion blurry his thoughts here... or is that too much of a feminine thing?

As far as concentrating on staying on top during the fight... what does that mean regarding thought sequence? The way I wrote it left no room for thought. It's more of an 'act, don't react' moment. That's how I figured a guy would behave in this situation, and that he'd 'react' afterward. So, I'm guessing by your reply that that's about right, yes?


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 16:17 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Yes, definitely. Unless he is going to stand there and analyze a fight sequence while those men are torturing that poor girl, ha! It would also be really different if he had significant training in the martial arts.


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Posted: 06 Mar 06, 19:55 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

No martial arts training for my hero. But he's street-wise and so won't shy away from this brawl. Nor will he let his lady-love be abused while he's still breathing.

Thanks for helping out here. I'm going to rewrite a small part of this scene to add a breather for him. Instead of him going for the girl once he gets the villain down, I'll have him wait to be certain the guy is out (which he won't be). That will give me a chance to insert a bit of introspection without it seeming contrived. And then... back to the action.

I feel better about the scene now than I did earlier. Thanks so much!!


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