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Posted: 31 Aug 06, 19:18 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I think it's lovely Kelley :-D!

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Posted: 31 Aug 06, 19:22 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

<font color="red">The Audacity of Kelley wrote:

May I have your opinion on what you didn't like, in that case ?

No. Because I luuurrved them! xD Specially the second one!


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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 01:04 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

That was my thread!
*sigh*
Thanks for bringing it back to life in your own way.
I figured it was a lost cause once The_Hero left and Queen are the Champions and I dont post much here anymore.

Loved taht first one, the repetition really makes a strong accent on what you're saying.

And that second one is really fun. Almost Shel Silverstien like for adults....
I enjoyed it very much. keep them coming!

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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 07:56 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Not the best I've done by a long run, but take into consideration that I only spent 15 minutes on it. Feel free to slam it if you like. Here goes:

Shores of Eternity

A thousand thoughts keep me afloat
As the wind brings news from the past
Whilst dreams and laughter echo
I drift along the shores of my mind

I fly on wings of memory
Over lands lighted by the fires of passion
In woodland realm I dwell a while
Fingering the impressions on the trees
Of my mind

The trees shed their leaves
Uncover their souls to Autumn
Who speaks gently in the wind
As rain pulses in the rhythm of life
And I am one

I feel the touch of her lips
As she whispers gently in my ear
Of times gone and to come
Yet floating, detached from time
Out to sea, the ocean of eternity

Rain touches my face
But misses me with every drop
I stand and feel absorbed
By colors running in the rains

The shroud of winter lies upon my shoulders
As warmed by my mind I drift
Away to my dreams, flying into the dawn
No longer held back by my shackles

I see with eyes not there but am blind with those you touch
I kiss you with the lips of my mind
And float on the streams of my mind



Not Plutus but Apollo rules Parnassus

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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 11:18 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Quite good, Thomas!


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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 12:17 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Yeeaa, the writer's appreciation thread! I was just looking at the old thread (which is now on page 7 btw) and wondering if someone was gonna start a new one!

Wow, all the poems on here so far were beautiful, I really liked them all! Definitely keep them coming!!

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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 14:22 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

<font color=pink>The Millionaire Waltz wrote:

Quite good, Thomas!


Thorougly mediocre if you ask me. I can do better, I know I can.


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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 14:33 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

<font color=red>Quonkers wrote:

You did better than I could ever do, TQ. As far as I'm concerned, you're a poet.


Thanks, I appreciate it, but I do not deserve so much credit over this poem. I'll do my best to come up with something better. You lot are entitled to that much.


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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 15:55 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Wow. :0 That was great, I could visualize it all so clearly, and I was just reading and nodding away!
"That's true!"
"That describes it perfectly!"


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Posted: 01 Sep 06, 23:01 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

I generally don't share poems and such but I just dug through what I've got on my computer. Two-thirds of the stuff are angry poems, lol. But I found this happy one, and since it's the only really happy one I found I figured, why not. Judging by its length and style, I'm sure it must've been something I whipped off the top of my head. Anyhow, reading through it made me feel somewhat cheerful:

Life


It is just another part of life
To be annoyed and hate your life
It gets better.
Yeah, when you think it can't get worse
Then it gets better.
Don't let people bring you down,
When you bring yourself down enough,
Who needs extra opinions,
When yours is what matters the most.
See beyond blackened hate,
And learn to love your state,
Hey, it can only get worse.
So appreciate what you got,
Learn to love who you are,
The world doesn't need more hate
So let's make the best of things
Let's change for good.
Make a choice and stand behind it,
And make it for the better.
Yeah, life will get better.




"The walls we build around us to keep sadness out also keep out the joy."

(Jim Rohn)
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Posted: 02 Sep 06, 12:44 Edit this post Reply to this post Reply with Quote

Great! That sounds like it would be translated very well into a song! :-D


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